Kurz 2/24

Today in class we worked on our outline rough drafts for our research paper. We continued to work on our thesis statement and topic sentences along with integrating evidence and providing an analysis for each piece. If we had any questions during class we were able to clarify anything we needed with both our classmates and mr rivers. In the beginning of class we briefly discussed what we accomplished during yesterday's class period while mr rivers was out. We sculpted and detailed our essay with our prior research and data. I personally took time to ask mr rivers to help me distinguish between two paragraphs under the same topic but they both were different at the same time. To form a topic sentence you also have to use The Who what when why where and how questions to specify. I also talked to him about my thesis feeling cluttered and he suggested using more specific verbs and detailing words to make my thesis specific but also not to lengthy or cluttered. To help specify try and use larger verbs and more detailed wording. The order of the topics is also important. You want to try and use a good order of the topics to make bother the beginning and end have strong evidence as the paper is argumentative and you want the reader to actually think about what had happened and what they could do to help change this.  Mr rivers was really helpful to try and make my sentences and claims the best they could possibly be.